Broken Thing(s) is me letting you hear the voice that doesn’t care if you make it out.
This piece is written in the devil’s voice on purpose.
Not because I am that voice.
Because I want you to recognize it when someone uses it on you.
Two cuts, same monster
You’ve got:
- an uncensored cut – the raw predator monologue, no disguise
- a censored cut – same bones, a little more platform-safe, with the mask half dropped at the end
The uncensored version is how this kind of Dom actually sounds in your DMs, your inbox, your late-night calls:
“I want to be your drug. Your obsession. Your addiction.”
“You have had your freedom and you have failed.”
“I want you to hate yourself so you can love me better.”
None of that is an accident.
This is groomer logic:
- Find someone who already feels broken.
- Confirm it: “You are lost. You are confused. You feel like nothing.”
- Reframe that pain as a reason to submit:
- “You’ve tried freedom and failed.”
- “Your feelings brought you to this place.”
- “This is your true path.”
- Make yourself the cure and the disease:
- “I want to be your drug.”
- “Let your calling take hold. Let me take hold of you.”
By the time the sexual line hits in the uncensored cut (“fuck your asshole with our hard cock”), it’s not random filth — it’s the punchline to a whole chain of emotional manipulation:
You’re broken → you’re nothing → I like that → only I see you → only I know your scars → now let me do whatever I want to you.
It’s not “edgy Dom talk.”
It’s a blueprint for how predators move.
Why I framed it as “the devil”
The intro literally tells you:
“In this original form, ‘the devil’ doesn’t censor Himself and doesn’t let you know it’s Him talking, just like in real life.”
That’s the whole point.
Predatory Doms rarely show up labeled:
“Hi, I’m here to exploit your abandonment issues and low self-worth for my orgasm and boredom.”
They present as:
- “nice man”
- “deep Daddy”
- “mysterious Master”
- “the only one who really gets you”
So this piece:
- starts in that seductive tone
- stays in it long enough for you to feel why it works
- and in the censored cut, finally signs it:
Signed the Devil (aka predatory Doms).
It’s a reveal, not a twist:
“Hey, that voice that felt weirdly hot? That’s the one that will chew you up.”
Broken people as “bait” vs. “beloved”
Key line:
“I can’t help but be drawn to broken people.”
There’s a version of this sentiment that’s real and human:
- “I’m drawn to people who’ve lived through shit.”
- “I feel protective of people who’ve been hurt.”
This piece is the dark mirror:
“I want you to hate yourself so you can love me better.”
Your shame becomes their fuel.
Your confusion becomes their leverage.
Your loneliness becomes their sales funnel.
That’s why the title is Broken Thing(s), not “Broken Hearts” or “Broken People.”
To this voice, you’re not a person. You’re a thing to use.
If you feel yourself flinching at lines in this piece, that’s good.
That flinch is your nervous system recognizing:
“I’ve heard this before.”
The demon imagery isn’t aesthetic, it’s a tell
All the “look into my eyes” and “do you see my demons?” language is there to show how predators romanticize their own damage:
“I am a vessel of torment and pain.”
“We have bled alone in the darkest of nights.”
On the surface, it reads like tortured-poet Dom energy.
Underneath, it’s doing this:
- “I’ve suffered, so my cruelty is deep.”
- “I’m broken, so my control is passionate.”
- “I understand your scars because I have demons… so let me be reckless with you, it’s poetic.”
That’s not accountability.
That’s branding.
Instead of:
“I’ve been hurt, so I need to be careful with you.”
it becomes:
“I’ve been hurt, so anything I do to you is profound.”
Huge red flag.
Why the sexual line is that blunt
Uncensored version:
“Waiting to fuck your asshole with our hard cock.”
Censored version:
“Waiting to split you open from the inside and call it devotion.”
These lines are supposed to feel like a record scratch.
You go from:
- emotional “understanding,”
- all this talk of scars and demons,
to something that’s essentially:
“We’ve listened to your pain; now we want to use your body.”
That whiplash is deliberate.
Because that’s how it happens in real life:
- They listen to your trauma story.
- They mirror your language.
- They call your pain “beautiful.”
- And then it goes straight to: “Be a good little thing and let me do [X] to you.”
I wanted you to feel how fast that turn is when you’re in it.
How to read this safely
This piece is not an aspirational Dom monologue.
It’s a warning label in the form of a seduction.
If you’ve ever been groomed, coerced, love-bombed, or talked into doing things while feeling like:
- “I’m nothing.”
- “This is my only chance.”
- “He understands me, so whatever he wants must be right…”
you might hear parts of your past echoed in here.
You’re allowed to:
- put it down
- come back later
- or never read it again
The point isn’t to trigger you for fun.
The point is:
“Next time someone talks like this to you, I want your spine to light up and go: Oh. This is that voice.”
And if you’re a Dom reading this thinking:
“Shit, I’ve sounded like this before,”
good.
That’s your wake-up call.
You don’t get to hide behind “it’s just kink” if you’re deliberately targeting people who hate themselves so they’ll love you harder.
How it fits in Cycle I
Cycle I remastered is doing groundwork:
- Starting Point… – how we even talk to strangers
- Onward and Upward… – value, gender, “marketplace”
- Great Expectations… – roles vs. reality
- The Sacrifice of Control… – what dominance should cost
- Objects in Space… / Beyond the Fantasy… – the physics and aftermath of connection
Broken Thing(s) is the villain monologue that lives under all of that.
Later cycles and later work dive into:
- pods and hives
- fake safety dogma
- hungry Doms
- vulnerable subs
- people confusing danger for destiny
This piece is the seed:
“Here’s how evil sounds when it uses pretty words and your own brokenness against you.”
If this one does its job, you walk away a little more suspicious of anyone who:
- loves how broken you are,
- calls it fate,
- and demands submission as proof.
You’re not a Broken Thing.
And if anyone ever talks to you like you are, I want this piece echoing in the back of your head like a smoke alarm.
That’s what it’s for.
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